tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19268887.post1808777306430342109..comments2024-03-17T18:44:03.058+11:00Comments on Lazy Luddite Log: Gumshoe Telepath - Run!Danhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12710148812664294219noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19268887.post-90716567785311240682010-06-03T23:44:00.986+10:002010-06-03T23:44:00.986+10:00I expect you are right. The trick there is me esc...I expect you are right. The trick there is me escaping my usual mode of (non-fiction) writing to something more befitting an action story. Will have to look at that (for past chapters also) once I get a chance...Danhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12710148812664294219noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19268887.post-74671463501568093762010-06-03T23:06:00.114+10:002010-06-03T23:06:00.114+10:00I wonder if it might feel a bit more immediate if ...I wonder if it might feel a bit more immediate if you rewrote some of the passive phrases in the active voice. What do you think?Andyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12189767375988164289noreply@blogger.com